From an early age, dance was a huge influence in all that I did. As a keen gymnast, dance and performance were a big part of my training. Then came the time in my early teens where a choice had to be made. I chose dance. After years of training at a dance school, and fully supported by my family, I went to college to study for a BTec National Certificate. From here, I was able to explore the different paths towards professional training and was granted a place at The Hammond School in Chester.
After a long, hard, exhausting, thrilling, challenging (I could go on!!) 3 years at The Hammond, I graduated with a distinction in my National Diploma in Professional Dance. I then moved from Chester to London where I lived for two years and I worked on and off the stage, at The London Palladium. Some of the work was paid, some voluntary.
I have certainly had my eyes opened to the ups and downs in the ‘world of showbiz’ and I have learnt to look ahead to try to make, and stabilise, a future for myself. I have recently gained experience working in a school to see how I feel about using the teaching skills from gymnastics in a school setting. All of these experiences have given me a great advantage in life and I feel it has given me a good grounding. I enjoy attending the theatre, reading, socialising and exercising. I am a person who enjoys life and realise’s the hard work it takes to continue to do so. From this, I am now furthering my qualifications and studying for a degree, hoping it will be the stepping stone needed to continue in my path towards full time teaching. I would like to think that I will be using my training and further education to help and advise others. I feel I am dedicated and committed to making my own pathway, starting with gaining a degree. I am hard working and motivated enough to make a stable living for myself and my future, through gaining this qualification.
Hi Michelle,
ReplyDeleteI loved the first two paragraphs of your profile; they are to the point without becoming impersonal and have a great flow, so they're easy to read.
I felt the last big paragraph could do with a bit of condensing, and maybe try breaking it up into two paragraphs? Perhaps one being what you've come to realise and the other how you've decided to act on that?
Hope this is helpful!
Hi Michelle, I agree with Liam. I like that you have a really friendly yet serious approach. You have really put accross that you are a hardworking and dedicated person but also your love for dance. I would also consider condensing the final paragraph but I like the sentence: "I have certainly had my eyes opened to the ups and downs in the ‘world of showbiz’" because I think the reader can empathise with you and it shows that you have learned from real life experience.
ReplyDeleteHope this is a help. You have given me some great help for when it comes to writing my own profile.
Hi Michelle,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your personal profile and I really related to your desire to ensure and stabalise a future for yourself.
I like the fact that you really put accross the sort of person you are - eg. hardworking.
I would suggest taking away 'all of these experiences have given me a great advantage in life and I feel it has given me a good grounding', due to you not really explaining what these advantages are.
I think it's a really good length (something I'm battling with), straight forward and engaging.
Sarah x
Ooh, and you don't need an apostrophe for the word 'realises' (8th line up from the end) x
Good work Michelle, but also good work Liam, Emily and Sarah. Your commentators Michelle have all identified improvements you might make ... develop this network, contribute to them, and you will build a powerful support network for the programme, and beyond.
ReplyDeleteThank you everyone, again, all noted and you shall see a second draft posted on my blog shortly, this time as a google doc! Now I have the hang of it!!
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